
His first rain, From a little scrawny window, Droplets pattering and dew forming, His first thought is a big spit or too much sweat. His second rain, Through open gates And-he-could- crawl- cross-fall Above those big bouncy raindrops, Stripped in straps he looks- At The kids dancing, He feels his heart sighing and shunning The remorse- and skipping with the drops falling.
Hello guys this is Kunjal! This poem presents a little contrast about sorrow and happiness. To dance in the first rain or just feel its beat as a kid is a reflective thought.😃.
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What is your pro and con for rain?
Also written for the W3 prompt#7
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H’m the freeverse is nicee…I think I’ll try writing something too 🙂
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Glad you liked it veera!😃😃
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Kunjal – this is so full of empathy – a lovely poem.
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Thank you David!😃❤️
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I loveee rainn!! It rained so much here in the past few days 🤩. Lovely poem, Kunjal!
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Thanks nehal
Rain 🌧️ has quite cooled the sauntering earth!
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Thoughtful, gentle and quite beautifully expressed.
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Thank you ❤️😃.
Thanks for your visit!😃
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A child’s perspective is a nice new approach… Reminds me of Rabindranath Tagore’s take on clouds and waves, have you read it?
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ahh Nice to hear from you Sushmita!
I read the poem at your suggestion and Yes the verses by Tagore are beautiful!
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Thank you 😊 Reading is a luxury these days, with work having started full steam, I usually take time out on Sundays to read all the blogs I enjoy following, so please bear with me…
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I love both the peace and tranquility that rain offers. This was such a reflective and gorgeous poem to read! Very beautifully penned. Great job, Kunjal👏🏻👏🏻😊
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Yes and the natural coolness it suddenly brings down to everything!
Thank you Jan! Is rain frequenting your place too?
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Sometimes, it does rains. I think it mostly depends on the season.
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Aah nice
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Kunjal,
Sarah has selected you as this week’s Poet of the Week for W3, which means that this poem of yours will be our Poem of the Week! Congratulations!
Could you please send me 1 or 2 guidelines for this week’s prompt as soon as possible (preferably in the next day or two)?
Thanks!
David
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Thank you David!
Yes sure! 😃
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Hi, Kunjal! As you can see from David’s message, I’ve chosen you for the next Poet of the Week! Congratulations! I really enjoyed how you created a strong contrast of emotions through the child’s eyes. My favorite images were his heart “shunning the remorse” and “And-he-could- crawl- cross-fall/Above those big bouncy raindrops”! Looking forward to next week’s prompt. 🙂
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Thank you Sara for the amazing prompt!
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Congratulations kunjal!! Just read the above comments
Also great poem❤
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Thank you akshita!
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oooh this was WONDERFUL to read, adored it💗💗💗
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Hi suhani!
Thank you ❤️😃
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This is a lovely poem❤💕
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Kunjal, this week’s W3 is now live ~ we’d love to have you join in!
https://skepticskaddish.com/2022/06/29/w3-prompt-9-weave-written-weekly/
Much love,
David
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THIS IS BEAUTIFUL 🥺🥺 i LOVE all the emotions and various feelings you’ve added into the poem and omggg THE CROSS BETWEEN HAPPINESS AND SORROW????? I AM BASICALLY IN LOVE WITH THIS
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Ah thank you Anoushka!!! 😃 Means a lot!
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